能较灵活地使用部分学术词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
They have been happened many cases about campus violence incident in China recently.We got the relevent news from internet and most of people in China are very angry. They show their comment on the internet. When we read these angry comments, we should think seriously how to avoid it beside angry. How to improve school safety is an important incident in the society. for school, they should add security guard who need to go to the grounds frequently. Teacher tell the student what is right or wrong.