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Dear John sriscoll, I'm the general manager of sales department in Fox Electronic Comply. I'm honored on behalf of our company to inform you that the meeting date scheduled on 20th June. At the meeting we will discuss the launch date of the new product and the advertising campaign. Plesase let me know if this would be converent for you or inform us of your arrangement. Wish to establish long_term cooperative relationship with you. Thanks and best regards. Tom Smith