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With the advance of society, more and more people and afford a car. As the number of the use of cars is sitll increasing, we are forced to face some problems. Such as the air pollution and the increasing pressure on trafic and. The prior attract wide attention in the country and the whole world. To solve this problem, govenment agencies in some big cities recently suggest that a "pollution tax" should be put on private car in order to control the number of cars and reduce the pollution in cities. For my part, I agree with this viewpoint. My reasons are as follows:
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