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In this summer holiday, I participated in an English Summer Camp. Various activities were hold during the camp, such as listening English lecture in English coner, watching English movie, teaching the foreigners make the dumplings as well as sing chinese songs. As for me, I like the last one best, because we can share our fun with the foreigners and practice our oral English. Besides, in the process of making dumplings, we can try to introduce our traditional culture to them. We did really learn a lot and have a good time in this smmer camp; however, if we have more time to contact with English-speakers, we can improve our English faster and better.