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Dear editor, I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we recently had about whether it is good or not for families to own cars. With the development of people's living conditions,more and more people have their own cars. Some of us think it good to own a car. Firstly,it's a convenient,fast and comfortable means of transportation tool. You can go to a lot of places at any time. Secondly,cars will pollute our air and we do not breathe fresh air.Thirdly,it will affect the trainsports.When the cars become more and more,the road become more crowded.And it will lead more accident.Finalily,it is not convenient for us to stop our cars in the park,and the price of fossil oil will become more expensive. I think more prople can take bus or ride bycicle if they want to go out!