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As is saying goes:"It is unwise to put all your eggs in one basket."Sample as it is,it subtly reveals a throught-provoking and enlightening message that we can not focus on one aspects,ignoring another indispensable part in the issue. There are several reasons for this issue,and I would like to explore some primary ones.Firstly,we have large opportunity to meet difficult and trouble,in which case we may be defeated if we have only plan.For instance,if we investage one financial product,we will reinforce the dangerous rate and lost money.Additionally,with the fully armed and well-prepare,we can deal with ancident in a proprative way.Two-hand prepartion make us easiy acheieve our expectation. From my perspective,we should pay attention to the fully prepared.Only when we are strong and intelligent enough can we soar with the dream.