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I have a good friend,she is a yong girl who has loog hair,and she has a big eyes.She named LiHua,as we know she is much friendly to everyone and very pleasantry.She is kind to us and often try her best to help us while we in trouble.As result of she is a good man that she has many friends.I think she will become a great stateswoman. OK,that's all,she is my best good friend.She is very well,is'not she.