3.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
可增加从句和复杂句的使用;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
long time no see how are you doing,i had been arrived home for some time and decided to write you a letter,i hope everything is going well with you . my life at home is going back to the track now and i still recollet the wonderful time when i study at new orleans as an exchange student.and i will never be fogotten you,my old best friends who provide me with houseing ,eatting and travel guidance when i was living in your home,and words fail to express my emotion for you guys,thank you . and if you come to china,i guarantee you that my affection will pour out for you ,i will give you the extremly careful service for you and leave you an unforgetable time. wellcome to china,i am looking forward to your coming.
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