单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;可以适当增加副词的使用;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
My hometown where lied in the south of China is the third island in China.It is beautiful and we can visit some natural scenery. Suppose a foreign friend of mys is going to visit my hometown,I will take him to see the sea.we can enjoy a good time on the beach.Maybe we can play baseball on the beach or have a barbecue.