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My hometown where lied in the south of China is the third island in China.It is beautiful and we can see some natural scenery. Suppose a foreign friend of mys is going to visit my hometown,I will take him to see the sea.We can enjoy a good time on the beach.Maybe we can play baseball on the beach or have a barbecue.Also,we can watch the sunrise on the beach.I think it will be interesting.In the other hand,I will take him to eat some food such as majiao fish rice and soup noodles with beef brisket.I bealive that he will like it because of its delicious.