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My hometown where lied in the south of China is the third island in China.It is beautiful and we can see some natural scenery. Suppose a foreign friend of mys is going to visit my hometown,I will take him to see the sea.We can enjoy a good time on the beach.Maybe we can play baseball on the beach or have a barbecue.Also,we can watch the sunrise on the beach.I think it will be interesting.On the other hand,I will take him to eat some food such as Pan-Fried Mackerel rice and soup noodles with beef brisket.I believe that he will like it.Because it is pretty delicious.