句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累学术词汇;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构;可以适当增加副词的使用。
My hometown where lied in the south of China is the third island in China.It is beautiful and we can see some natural scenery. Suppose a foreign friend of mys is going to visit my hometown,I will take him to see the sea.We can enjoy a good time on the beach.Maybe we can play baseball on the beach or have a barbecue.Also,we can watch the sunrise on the beach.I think it will be interesting. On the other hand,I will take him to eat some food such as Pan-Fried Mackerel rice and soup noodles with beef brisket.I believe that he will like it.Because it is pretty deliciou.