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happiness is occured wherever or whenever happpens on our life.we are happy from which we are touched,of helpfull,loved,friendship,carefull and so on.however ,no pain,no gains.we shall learn how to make our life happy.next,i will tell you about my story.in my middle school,my deskmate is poor in math and he is very depressed in class.however ,he don't make conversation with others and shamed of asking others about math problem.i know his story and try to help him. but ,he always refuse anyone.i don't give up him and believe in his change .first ,i want to make friends with him.i would invite him to attend activity together after shcool.as time went by,he started to accept me and asked me math matters.finally,we maked good friendship.i first think helping others or be helped is a happiness thing.
