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we live in the world but don't live forever.so what can we do in order to make the llife meaningful. most oof us always waste time .when we find it in one day,we are be old.for the sake of avoiding it,i have pieces of advise as follows.at fist,we should learn untill e died.when we are studeng,learning is our obiligage,but after we gratuated from school,which not mean the learning is finished,secondly,as we help others,we can have a good feel.and which is also one of the meaning in life.and last but not most importence,having a tour in free time,we can visit many scene that can broad our eyesightand let us know more things in the world. when it comes to me,i don't waste time to play the game,but i will spend time running.the reason is that the health body is the basic we do everythings.
