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Nowadays, more and more people rely on one key without consideration about the high risk and other unexpected situations. For example, most college students prefer staying up to review the contents marked by the professor rather than studying every day; The old and the middle-aged women are apt to deposit their money in the bank because of the security without considering the extremely low interest rates. However, I believe it unwise to put all the eggs in one basket. If doing so, we will confront the situation that the whole eggs are broke and the consequences we can't take up. Thus, the students will fail to go through the course and the people will lose a lot of money. To avoid such assumption, it is essential for the people to divide the money into several parts to get profits and it is much easier for the students to study the whole semester. Above all, we should learn to put eggs in several baskets by which we can achieve more than ever.