内容:本人在12月15日到22日在纽约举行的展览会期间了解到贵公司产品号为5670的新产品,非常感兴趣,请贵方发给我们一份价格单和说明书。感谢贵方的合作,希望我们可以建立贸易关系。
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1.price list and instruction价格单和说明书
2.establish business relationship建立贸易关系
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From:hubin@163.com To:KPOHsales@hotmail.com Subject: to set up business relationship Dear : When I was in the exhibiton in New York during 15th Dec and 22th Dec, I found that the product Number 5670 is your new product ,I am very interest in it ,would you pls sent us your price list and instructions. thanks for your coorparation ,wish a business in the future. Sinerely yours KPOHsales