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My hometown is Laocheng which is famouS for a lake,named Dongchang lake.There is no doubt that I surely take my friend to this beautiful place to relax ourselfives.Some reasons as followed to account for this pact. First of all,there is a big lake sourrounded a lot of trees .It is so tender and mild like a beautiful girl.Her water is so clean that we can see many different fishes driving.Needless to see,the shy is bule without any dirty.Fresh air, clean water ,worm wind all of them are precious for mordon socity.Last but not least,we can meet lots of interesting people.Some old people may dance at a place with music while young people may fly kit or play game. I strongly think that we will have a good time at Dongchang lake.
