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i am of great honor to introduce my hometown to you. my hometown is in xiamen, there has many famous senice and spot. the most famous spot ia named gulang island. it was a beatuiful island full of cultur atmospher. in this island, you will see a staue firstly, his name is zhengchenggong. in ming disney, he leaded army to refused japanese and protected chinese which made him a national hero. meanwhile , there has many snakes in the island. and i know you like eat snakes in particluar. thus you will like this place, aren't you? in addition, there has many histrocial spot, such as sunlight rock, panio musem and so on. finally, gulang island is the most famous place in my hometown which incorprate culuture and beauty. i hope you will like it.
