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From:wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date: Dec. 23, 2008 To : sales-departmnt@hotmail.com Dear Mr.Johnson: We have received a set of products which account 3000 pieces, but according to our signing of No.35 order, the product number is 3500 pieces, at present, we don't get the other 500 piece of products. Please check your product list. We are looking forward to your early reply. Yours Sinerely. Wang haiyang