Subject: My Favorite FestivalFrom: Wang Kun
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As far as I am concerned,I like the Spring festival.The reason that I like it is that the day is so important in our culture. It is universally acknowledged that the Spring festival is a traditional festival which is celebrated from ancient time.Apart from that,there are so many customers such as playing fireworks and eating dinner together.What is more,what makes children delighted is that they can wear new clothes.Of course,we will also be dressed in suits.In addition,what I think is the warmest time is that families get together to have dinner.In my memories,we have little time spend with our parents,so I really miss these periods. All in all,the Spring festival is manful in my heart.There is no denying the fact that the day which is important to all chinese impress me all the time.