文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
I am so delighted to hear that you are coming to China.The place which I would like to take you to see is JiuJiang. There is no deny the fact that the city is so beautiful place that no word can describe.Aprat from that,the weather there is so warm that you will fall in love with it when you arrive.What is more,the famous mountain,which has several cultures,is localed in JiuJiang.It is universally acknowledged that The Mount Lu is famous for its special scenes and cultures.When you stay here,you will be lost in its beauties.Ancient people like LiBai,who writes articles,describe its beauty.Quantities of people,from aboard and home,forget the difficulties and spread no effort to see it fantastic scenes.In addition,the tea in JiuJiang is sold all over the world.When you go to a teahouse,you will get many great memories. On balance,you will have a wonderful time in JiuJiang.I cherish the hope that the scenes in JiuJiang will impress you.