拼写做的很棒,学术词汇可适量增加;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用。
Thesedays,a growing number of high-tech products flow into our daily life,leading to less communication face to face .We are more likely to talk with others by wechat ,qq and so on.Consequently,the impacts of the internet on impersonable communication are variable . To begin with,people are in the face of an embarrassment when they talk with each other face to face.they don’t know how to start with their talking.most of us think,it’s unnecessary to show you true feelings on internet and our mind is not limited.you know,face-to-face communication needs not only oral language but also body language,while some people say sometimes they can’t coordinate these two language. However, the communication on internet can promote people’s relationship.take me for example,before I enter the college,our students establish qq group,we know each other better in this way,and thus we quickly are familiar with each other after entering the college.In this case, it promotes our our communication face to face. From my perspective,the pros and cons on impersonal communication exist on at the same time.what we should focus on is not just their impacts,but how to do with these disadvantages.we ought to use cellphone properly,and don’t be in the charge of internet.
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