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Chatting online is more and more popular today Not only young people are crazy for it ,but also increasely old people are fond of chatting online .It 's not denined that the internet make our contact frequently and shorten our distance how far away we are . However,Internet has caused some negative impact on interpersonal communication.In the recent year,the use of vulgar language and Internet fraud frequently happend has caused loss of integrity and accomplishment in our society.There is a scene we ofen see that someone frequently play cellphone to reply message on QQ and ignore the companion of conversation at the table.When we are used to chatting on line but we ignore or don't know how to communicate with others in reality. The internet make our life convenient and accelerate our pace of life .It promotes our contact but don't promotes our feeling.
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