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Nowadays, computer has became an important part of our life. It has many functions. For example, we can use it to relax ourselves, we can watch movies, or listen to music, even we can play games; we also can use it to study or get informations on the internet, what's more, some people can work at home because of computer; we also can chat on line through some softwares, regardless of the distance between us. All of above are the advantages of the computer, but, what are the disadvantages of computer? computer occupy us too many times. Computer can bring many good things to us, at the same time, it spends our many times to do these things. Such as communciate with people around us. We depend on computer and are used to talking on line, even lose sight of communication in reality. Little by little, we are disabled from commumicate with people face to face, we unable to examine a man's language and observe his countenance. In a word, I think the impact of the internet on interpersonal communication is bad, we should communicate with people in reality more, rather than communicate on line.
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