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if my friend come to my hometown,i will interduse my hometown to him.my hometown in hechuan.frist, it is s beatiful city.when you come to hechuan.you will see three river acress the city.so the city has many part.used briadge getother.and the wather is clever.sometime,you can see peopie swimming in the river and sent the food to fish.people alawys comfortable in hechuan.seconed,it is a long histroy city.when the ming danasty,the war in here,it is a key plaese.so,it s history set in the history book,and everybody knows.thired,it is a tridious food plaese.the famous food is sheep meet noodles,if you come to this.you must eat sheep meet noodle,to grareetee you come to hechuan. wellcome to my hometown hechuan,i will be right here waiting for you.