托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第48篇:是否是只有你赢得了比赛才说明参与运动是有价值的

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"Participating in sports is worthwhile only when you win something. "I don't agree with the whole of it. Yes,we take exercise every day,we practise every day,yes,every anthlet wishs to the winner of the contest.Certainly the winner should be noticed by the audiences,because they devoted their precious time and effort,and they must act well in the contest,so they win at the last,and the result is Participating in sports is worthwhile when you win something. that's ture.But Participating in sports isn't worthwhile when you loses omething?Is it right? Yes,every Participator wishs to be the winner,but factualy in one contest there are winners,on the contrary,there are losers too.When they fail in the match,we needn't admit,or even respect their devotion? The answer is no.Even if they fail in the match,they devote their time and efforts as the winners. Their failture is just because they don't feel well that day,or don't deal well in the match,or other speail reasons and so on. No matter you are winners or losers in the match,Participating in sports is worthwhile,all of them deserve our respect.