2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(54):夏令营活动

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my name is wangshan,l am a girl who is studying in sunshing school in beijing age of 16.l like music Photography and good at comunication with everyone.and l often help people when they need to need help.l hope the wolrd is piece.the people is happly.l got some friend by the Summer camp，at the sometime knowabout some curlture of foreign.