2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(54):夏令营活动

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my name is wangshan,l am a girl who is studying in suns hing school in beijing age of 16.l like music Photography and good at communication with everyone.and I help people fruently when they need to need aid.l hope the wolrd is a piece.the people is happly.l got some friend by the Summer camp，at the sometime know about some culture of foreign.