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作者词汇基础很好，也能较灵活使用学术词汇，望继续努力；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Hundreds of years ago, we have no power to cover miles of distance, how can we image, nowadays, we remove all the barriers to reach each other by only few hours. Air planes and automobiles should take the credit for that. But I would rather to vote for automobiles when we pay a close look on which has a greater influence. Because of automobiles' wide usage, we do improve our efficiency, create more employment opportunities and enhance our relationships. Saving time, is also the topic in modern society. Time is money. Assuming that we have to walk on our feet, we could almost waste the whole day on our journey, especially for some business men. In big urban, automobiles is widespread and every family presumably has one car or more. It boosts our productivity not only for rich persons who could afford airplane. For examples, in Chinese traditional spring festival, most people will choose cars or train to go home, only a few people has the money to fly back and forth. Totally, we can fine the time saving in cars weighs much over than the time saved by airplanes. Because, cars is cheaper, and is used by larger people. Cars' population also promote a huge sum of business in China. For examples, On line shopping, and delivery industry are increased in tune with the quantity of Chinese car. Furthermore, due to this new growth point, many have find job. China has the largest people in the world, and its unemployment will causes catastrophic problem. Thanks to the high speed development of these industry, china is becoming better and better. For my grandparents, they had seldom chance to seat cars in the past days. On the contrary, they can easily keep in touch with their families. They usually come to visit us when they are available, which definitely make our family environment harmonious. What's more, we can visit them either, when we have spare times. It seems very easy for us to drive home. That's the point. The appearance of cars conceivably change our living pattern. We are tightly united. We can enjoy a meal with our distant relatives or friends as we want. Admittedly, airplane does have a lot of advantages, but compared to cars. All of they become minor. Far from being popular, the airplane price is still expensive. At least so far, cars are still one of the driving factor of our social development, which casts huge influence.
