GRE写作Issue模拟题:The Importance of Science and Art

文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，但学术词汇稍显不足；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳。

With the technology developed,we are coming into a new world different from ever one.There is no doubt of the science palys a very important role in our society.In some way it brings us the truth and the nature of things.We are much clear to know who we are and what is life and others about life.As well as the art make us more perceptual than before.So now we judge things with scientific and perceptual. I had experienced a thing which i never forget and change me forever.I am a clinic student.I had met a patient which had a very serious medical emergency,but he do not know how to impress.My teacher talked him clam down and slow to talk.Though what he said was coarse,my teacher could understand what he means.This shocked me and the teacher talked me it is power of the science and art.I understood right now. With it i realised that the science and art gives us so much in many ways.