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The information explosion With the social and technology development,there are a variety of network commmunication tools have occurred.While we surfing in the internet,a lot of advertisiments and information will distract my attention. Just as the saying goes,a wealth of information creates a poverty of attention. Information exploision has a great influence on our life.To begin with,lots of information in the internet will interupt our oringinal thinking and we cannot finish task on time.Morever,it will distract our attention and absorb our eyes to see other advertisements so that we forget information what we need.In addition,a wealth of information made some students always play computergames and cannot focus on their study. As fa as i am concerned,i will take some notes on the parper which information that i want to search.When i scan the website,i will close some advertisements to keep my focus.