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Last weekend,I interviewed Kelly Lam,who is a psychology specialist,concerning the attitude to sharing of chinese students.No matter happy or depressed,more than 30% of students didn't willing to sharing their feelings with others.The research showed that students thought little of the significant of sharing with the purpose of being little educated. Kelly Lam held the viiews that it is necessary to pick up sharing living in this century.The sutdents should how to share their emotions,which is beneficial to the future development.