希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
The passage is talking about some parents helicopter children,don't let their children learn from mistakes,they often make a decision for their children. As we all know.There are many difficulties in life,and only through the troubles can we learn to grow up.Some parents who helicopter children pay close attention to their children,make their children everything is going smoothly.Actually,it is not good for children's develop.Take myself as an example,my parents often helicopter me when I was a children,they prevent me from hurt,so I became limited.When I go to university,I had to leave my parents,but I can't do everything by myself.I often cry when I met many difficulties.So I think it is not good for the children grow up. In my opinion,parents should let children practise,and do something by themselves to learn independent.It is good for children to grow up.