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If a foreign friend of mine want to visit the most interesting place on my hometown.I will take him to English corner of our school. The reasons are as follows.Firstly,it is convenient for him to contract with others,because there have many people are likely to speak english with foreigner to improve their spoken English.So my friend will be popular with them.Secondly,it is also an interesting place for people to enjoy,because there have many activities,such as singing English songs,dancing,and English play.Thirdly,it is a window of Chinese culture to my foreign friend,and it is beneficial for my friend to learn Chinese culture.It is a good opportunity for him to understand our culture. I believe my foreign friend will find English corner is a very interesting place,and make him unforgettable.