2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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On Excessive Packaging It is universally acknowledged that plenty of sellers package their product excessively.Useless and harmful,excessive packaging plays a terrible role in protecting our society. The phenomenon,in a large sence,give rise of the competition in business.For one thing,customers are almost involved in buying goods with a beautiful and fashionable looking,causing school of sellers,decide to package their product excessively.For another,in the modernized society, it is fabulous and unique goods that can be sold for a high price. As far as I am concerned,excessive packaging is a sense of waste.There is no doubt that customers ought to be sensible when they are shopping.With the same time,much more attention should be paied by productors to the quality of product.What's more,our government is supposed to take measures to push ahead with an environmental protecting and sustainable society.