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My hometown direction for southeast to the China,the city name is Wuhan.In my hometown,the people is so hot.you can take a airplane to the Wuhan Tianhe international aipport.then you can take subway to my house.there traffic is very developed. If you come to my hometown,i will be very happy,because i can lead you go to the "Huanghe tower"in the first,it's very famous in the world,in the top of tower,we can perspective all the city's for appearance.The second,we must go to the west lakes,the lake is vast and beautiful.I belief you will absolute love this place.the last,we can eat some special food,it's a local food for Wuhan. final,i'm so expect you visit my hometown,i think is will be very interesting.I represent the citizen welcome you.