使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;层次欠清晰;学术词汇稍微偏少,单词拼写方面也要继续努��。
As with the old saying goes, "Every road leads to Romma."In china of our time,much of concern should not only on our profession but also on the humanity study,because we have a wild range of choices to live a fine life.So we should concentrate on my comprehensive abilitity as modern youth and pillars just of China. Comprehensive ability is consisted of vast different ways such as professional knowledage,humanity study, the ability of dealing with problems of society and etc. For example,learning philosophy during his teenagers is the critical experience of Einstain causing he to regard physical problems in a philosophier's perspective.Sherlock Holmes plays the violin when he think about a comlicated case.Chariman Mao swimmed across Yangtze River in winter to strengthen his mind and body. So only when we put our efforts into all kinds of aspects what we may need ,can we have a brilliant tomorrow .