新东方托福高分作文:快餐能提升人们的生活质量吗?

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newadays, people, who have busy life, are getting more and more addictive to fast food, althougth they know that the fest food is harmful to their health. in my opinon, people should not have fest food very often, there are three reasons as follows. firstly, as everone knows that fest food is too rich that contain hight cholostrerols which give the risk of getting cancer.