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To some children,everything is ok.Because their parents has done well everything.Their parents give them the best lives,so children don't worry about their future. But, are you think about it? It is beneficial to children? In my opinion,parents'action doesn't help their children.Today, everyone needs independence,the society needs people can do things by themselves.Furthermore,as time goes by,people can'thelp their children all time,their will died some day in the future.so we must help children independent. What can we do for children,help them indepenent?First,give them some tasks when their are young,such as washing closhes,cleaning their room by themselves.When they are older,can ask them to buy something in the supmarket. In this way,it can help children independent.
