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Date: June 23rd, 2008 Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Li Ming, a 22 years old man. I am a sophomore in Beijing Normal University. I have a good command of English and have a keen interest in all kinds of sports. Being always ready to help others, I am urgently looking forward to contributing to Bejing Olympic Games 2008. Consequently, I intend to apply for the position of English translator. I wish I can be a volunteer in this Games. Thank you for your consideration to my application. Yours sincerely, Li Ming