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The behavior that to jump to conclusions upon seeing or hearing someting is wrong. The individuals always hold the idea is what they seeing and hearing it's must be ture.Some igonred the importance of practice.For the one hand,practice made perfect ,when we learn some thing we never heard.We should keep practice not just stay at seeing or hearing.Vision or listen sometimes will misleading our mind .Then,if you realiy want to know someting you never heard.You should try to practice.For instance,the famous scientist Edison who has invented the electronic light.Up till now,our lives also can't leave that.In the invention process,Edsion tired more than hundreds material to connect light inside the bulb.He finally made it through the hardy practice.Even in this days,he's name also impressed peoples mind.
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