可适当增加从句和长句的使用;作者词汇表达较丰富准确,不过学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
When we hear what it is ,we will draw a conclusion immediately. This is unwise for us to do. In our life, we decide to do almostly depending on the intuition. Maybe it's said to according to the common sense.But I don't think this way can be the criterion for sense of right and wrong. There is an old saying that seeing is believing. I consider it unwise to decide whether one is right or not. Sometimes what we see and what we hear are not the truth. we can't make an conclusion right now when we see or hear something. this is because we have no evidence to support what it is exactly. A lot of things occur in our life without the expectation . we have no idea when these things happen. we just follow the first intuition or choose the way that almost people would do it. I know people are sensory. we will do something that is less harm or not harm to ourselves. It is unwise to do things like that. I hope that we should look before you leap in the social life.
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