文章用词灵活多样,学术词汇使用也比较准确;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Nowadays,a great many of students are keen on acquiring certificate in consequence of the idea that the more they gain,the easier they will find a high-pay job.Admittedly,numerous students are heartily in favor of this point.Speaking for myself,they are completely wrong.Granting that you acquire more certificates than ordinary students have,can prove you are more capable than them?The answer is absolute negative.I'll manifest my view using a common phenomena. In essence,certificate is only a piece of paper.It merely shows that you are good at studying or your academic achievement.While,academic achievement isn't equal to your capability.In our daily life, so many examples can prove this point.We can see a knowledgable students doing some low-paying jobs after graduating.In contrast,some people become bosses,who don't gain high quality of education.Therefore,handling multi-various abilities is what matters,rather than possessing a wealth of knowledge. In short,as a student,It is correct that we need some certificates for our future.Nevertheless,we should know capabilities is more consequential than certificates.If we are not beware of this and keep requiring more and more certificates,we become machines,which expert at acquiring certificate .Unfortunately,our society needs qualified men,not machines.