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Nowadays,the amazing rapidly development of science and technology turns the whole world into the village.Therefore,communication among people is more and more convenient for us.For instance,we can chat with families or friends who are abroad or living away from long distance. That is no denying that significance are attached on the impact of the Internet on interpersonal communication.Nevertheless,we should realize the real world is more wonderful than the virtual world.To begin with,obviously,the impact of the Internet is so wild that we can use it fully and properly.It's a great tool.Secondly,we should be wise and cautious when we confront the temptation on the Internet. Last but not least,we should be looking for beauty from the real world.At the same time,we should look forward to the meaning of the life. From my perspective,we can't ignore the impact of the Internet on interpersonal communication,but we should also find the nature of life and make our lives more meaningful .
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