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As a Chinese,I love all over the interesting place in different regions in China.But the most interesting place which I prefer to is Mountain Tai. In this way,I would like to take him or her to climb Mountain Tai if a foreign friend of mine is going to visit our hometown. There are three reasons can illustrate it.For the first one, Mountain Tai,which is so beautiful that I have climbed it for two times.I think that everybody will love it if he sees it.Furthermore,this mountain is so high for us to climb.He must be strong and have achievement if he can climb the mountain in four hours.Last but not least, Mountain Tai is the most high mountain compared to other mountains. So it can present other mountains in mine mind. We can draw a conclusion above all, Mountain Tai has so beautiful sight for my foreign friend to visit.I believe that he would fall in love with it for the first sight.
