单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Today is Sunday. I got up early. then I help mother doing housework. After that I doing my homework. Then I playing basketball with my friends. at night I am watching TV with my father until eleven o'clock, then I went to bed. But I can't asleep until one o'clock. So, what a fulling day.