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Wangshan,a 16-year-old girl,comes from Beijing Yangguang Middle School.She likes listening and sing music and taking photos very much.Also,she is good at communicating with other persons and she loves helping everyone.She loves nature ang peace.And her perpose of taking part of camping is knowing more friend and learn about other country"s culture.