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3． 开头语已为你写好。
单词拼写很棒，可考虑增加学术词汇的使用量；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；结构不严谨，几乎没有使用衔接词，上下文衔接欠流畅。
I finished work on time recently. Because boss has returned home with his family, for his fathers' birthday. And I could do what I want to do, such as watching series movies called The vampire, or studying English. I noticed that I will improve a little or learn something when I am in WEB. For instance, I wrote a composition to Georgia yesterday. When I arrived there and found the party had been holding. And Georgia was one of the moderators. So I was doing courseware and waiting for her. As the party was end,she left WEB. When I was trying to return home, Peter ran into courseware lab to teach one of students, so I was brave and asked him some question too, I have not asked any qustions to foreign teachers before. After a small conversation, I took the composition and asked him to help revise. Shortly afterwards, he not only corrected it but read to me whether it was revised as well. I was so excited on the way.This was the first time having an amazing talking, I have come true my dream. By the time, I was sadness about the courseware, because I accidentally to turn the computer off and it did not keep the record what I have done. What a wonderful day!
