2007年高考英语作文真题(全国卷Ⅰ):找英语笔友

作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章词汇表达丰富，不过请增加学术词汇的使用；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳；可以适当增加副词的使用。

Dear Peter, I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor. I'm Li Hua,a normal middle school student who want to find a pen pal.I think you can give me some advice and some interesting persons to me. I'd like a pen pal who is same age as me .This will help our communication.And it would be better that she is a smart, clear and soft girl.I hope that she is interested in feeding pets,travelling and doing sports .Of cause, sha could have another good hobby, this will open my view and develop more skill in something besides study.In my school life ,I have many close friend.I talkd with them about everything I knew.But now I think I am not filled with the person who is almost knowing me.A beautiful stanger can give a excited feeling that I have been curious about for a long time.I wish you can help me. I am waiting your good message for me.Thank you! Best regards, Li Hua.