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Many years ago, my hometown was very beautiful. There were lots of trees crowding the town. The houses were very simple and the stress were very tidy. The people's life was very poor and tired. but now, There are many high buildings and big shops everywhere.you can see cars and buses,taxies in the stree. However, the invironment of my hometown is worse and worse. The trees are cut down ,the fish is disppear.above all, The priority is to solution the pollution is